After creating our 'first edit', we showed it to Jon, our lecturer, for some feedback. Initially he said it was coming along nicely, but needed a bit more Video Effects to be added to the Flashback shots, more Close-up shots on me and my character to show 'Ownership of Flashbacks', more Close-up shots on Emily and her character and more Close-ups and shots in general of the two characters interacting with each other or interacting with camera. He suggested the edited cuts and transitions between shots in the introduction should be in sync with the music, in other words 'cut to music' to establish the relationship between the music and visuals, and suggested we cut down on the number of different transitions used (consistency and continuity, or Match-On-Action), as it generally looked like a 'Students' Botch-up job of making a video'.
He did, however, like the way in which we stepped away from each other (Emily and I) in the tennis courts whilst throwing a tennis ball to and fro, a metaphorical way of showing the growing distancing between the two characters in terms of their relationship.
Finished on Friday 12th March (2010) and including the proposed 'Super 8mm Effect' (I think the flashback shots should be slowed down more to give more of an older feel to these particular shots), this is the Second Edit (below), though I must warn you that it's not the final version!
